The challenge of the wordle for me is to use all the words in as short a verse possible. Great fun.
Anyone up for a weekly challenge?You have to use all the words and it must be short.
Hades
No patter of little feet
or birdsong in this grim dungeon
The King's face had the patina
of dark decayed red eggshells
He wore a frosted crown of bent rusty nails
and with a lubricious leer muttered
snatches of foreign verse and fiction
punctuated by intermittent staccato screeches
sounds that resembled a panic stricken frog
being bludgeoned with a hacksaw or footlocker
RWP 114 Wordle
footlocker ,hacksaw, frog ,panic, fiction, muttered ,lubricious, nails, crown, frosted
eggshells,red,decay, patter
Ha! Poor frog, but still funny. I love how one can only *surmise* that the bludgeoning is being done either by footlocker or hacksaw, as if that were a logical conclusion, as if anyone had the slightest idea what that might sound like exactly. Dig those gross-out eggs, too. Smile.
ReplyDeleteThe frog is being bludgeoned with etc ..which means a person is involved...Really Sarah!
ReplyDeleteOf course I know what it sounds like...but then I spend a lot of time in the outback. We kill the dreaded cane toads with hacksaws and footlockers.Will send photos.
Wonderful humour. The image of a panic stricken frog being bludgeoned by a hacksaw or footlocker is so hilarious. You are a laugh a minute gal!-Irene
ReplyDeleteA bit of silliness is essential to life Irene!
ReplyDeleteI love the way you depict the King with very striking visual and aural notes. Those readings of his must really be insufferable :).
ReplyDeleteHo. Good one. And an excellent use for that freaking footlocker. I did a short one as well as my "real" poem, but it was just a substitution, so probably wouldn't count.
ReplyDeleteI like how you managed not to directly injure anyone or anything, but still managed to use the word 'hacksaw.' (All we know is the intermittent screeches resemble the sounds a bludgeoned frog might make, if it were bludgeoned.) That was a humane act of poetry.
ReplyDeleteBravo: tight, on target!
ReplyDeleteNifty character sketch... but the ending! Aw!
ReplyDeleteInteresting take on the prompt, using them all in the shortest verse possible. Normally I get so fed up that I have to throw in a couple extra lines to make the transition from one word to another. :P
Nicely done and very descriptive. I admire how you can do this without any of the word usage sounding forced or superfluous.
ReplyDelete-Nicole
I cannot resist a challenge
ReplyDeleteBuilding the Upright Poem
nail rust-frosted hacksaw
onto a red footlocker.
string with frog
(tongue mutters low tones
decaying gut shrieks panic)
crown the resonator with lubricious eyeballs.
glue eggshells in a patter
to the fiction of its soundboard.
Excellent use of theses words Ral. I enjoyed the story here, thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the classification as a humane poet
ReplyDeleteJohn.Having read both your poems which are both excellently written I cannot return the
'humane'compliment.So how's the therapy going?
Your comment is very much appreciated Nicole.
ReplyDeleteGlad you mentioned that Joseph.The idea is not
ReplyDeleteto add lines to make sense of the words(of course you have to to a certain extent).I think
the poems should also be narrative to avoid using just a sequence of words which don't make any much sense.
Barbra Seville poetess extraordinare is going to take up the challenge.There is going to be a prize if I can get a few people to regularly
take part.I will contribute the wordles but the winner will be decided by two other RWP
members as well as myself.
The prize can only be accepted on condition that a photograph is taken with the prize so
that I can put it on my blog and of course the Prize is a surprise! So how about it Peeps!
OK you're on Babs!
ReplyDeleteThanks Flaubert and Francis.
ReplyDeleteWE both followed the wordle to royalty. How intriguing!! Enjoyed the heck out of this, especially the eggshell line. Not sure why, but it spoke to me. LOL.
ReplyDeleteThanks Alan.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you got a laugh out of this Julie!
A flurry of paper writing at deadline has delayed me this week. Enjoyed this one, as usual, rallentanda! I'm still wrapping my head around the sound the King made when he "muttered / snatches of foreign verse and fiction / punctuated by intermittent staccato screeches." Sounds like a piece of performance art.
ReplyDeleteThe poor frog, well, put in context of the cane toad, I certainly understand the ruthless carnage via hacksaw or footlocker. ;)
haha - nice!
ReplyDeletelots of interesting vocalizations going on here but I wonder -- does a frog have time to screech when bludgeoned with a footlocker?
or is he screeching at the approaching shadow-of-death?
Angie as an animal conservationist except for
ReplyDeletecane toads,deadly snakes,spiders,sharks,blue ringed octopus,stone fish and the sea wasp I wouldn't dream of hurting a frog.Frogs are cruial to the ecological environment.I apologise to all the frogs out there..I really meant your enemy the cane toad...funny how it was the humans who brought up the frog issue..all the frogs knew it was a joke !
Wonderful fun - I do hope the bludgeoned frog wasn't the proverbial prince and that some poor princess is now short a hub. Great imagery.
ReplyDeleteI like how you have used these words....well done...and no problem frogs are wonderful and never take us humans serious
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