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Friday, November 16, 2018

Erasure Poem - Neruda

If You Forget Me 

I want you to know
one thing



Portrait by Katherine Jeanne Wood

if you stop loving me
I shall stop loving you 

do not look for me,
for I shall already have forgotten you.

If you decide
to leave me at the shore
I will set off
to seek another land.

But (after a time)
if you feel that you are destined for me
ah my love, ah my own,
in me all that fire  is extinguished
your love will be without  mine.





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From the Latin word for “patchwork," the cento (or collage poem) is a poetic form made up of lines from poems by other poets. Though poets often borrow lines from other writers and mix them in with their own, a true cento is composed entirely of lines from other sources. Early examples can be found in the work of Homer and Virgil.

Found poetry is a type of poetry created by taking words, phrases, and sometimes whole passages from other sources and reframing them as poetry (a literary equivalent of a collage) by making changes in spacing and lines, or by adding or deleting text, thus imparting new meaning.





10 comments:

  1. Very well said — they are not worthy of our love if they cannot love or cannot decide whether they love us. Going forth to seek another land indeed, another shore where we are cherished. That last stanza is perfect in how it portrays a singularly spirited heart and mind that would seek its own love without looking back. :-)

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  2. I wonder whether the amount of love lost in broken relationships equals the amount of love that lasts? I think women are wiser than men in this matter as they can distinguish between love and lust.

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  3. If we can't live in another's memory, then we embrace life and live on.

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  4. I think this is a wonderful erasure poem; you have done it beautifully. (A brave thing, to take on the great Neruda! Even better to succeed.) But although ti is not altogether clear from the online definitions, my understanding of a cento is that it combines lines from a number of different poets.

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  5. (I tried to comment before, but I think I managed to lose it.)

    I think this is a wonderful found poem. Very brave of you to tackle the great Neruda in this way, and you have completely succeeded. (I am not sure it is a cento, though, as I have always understood them to be made up of lines from a number of different poets – except the 'egomaniacal cento' which uses lines from a number of different poems of one's own. I think this is more of an erasure.)

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  6. Yes you are correct it is an erasure poem. I am not brave. It just never occurs to me not to tackle things (foolhardy)..In my book if I can write a cento on Will then anyone else is fair game:)Glad you liked it anyway.

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    1. Oh yes, I love it anyway! The label is of course the least important thing about a poem. But I note your correction (smile).

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