I was hoping to write something light and daffodil but you know poems ,they always have their way. So here t'is
After Midnight
She was still in bud
The others had peaked early
leaving her behind
their tarnished blooms blown
drooped destined for a
brown pressing between print
Her petals were reluctant to unfold
She had overstayed the cocoon
Emerging, she blinked dumbfounded
dazzled by the truth beyond safe pink
Grateful to the God of dysfunctional delay
but no longer able to endure
betrayal
toxic kisses
jet judas eyes peering out
from behind black curtains
of middle eastern hair
she thought of that coach
The prince could keep his glass slipper
Turning into a pumpkin
after midnight seemed
very appealing
The wisdom of a late bloomer. I really like the world-weariness of that final stanza.
ReplyDeleteI got mine done early this week:
Fruit of a bizarre love triangle
and I'm sure I'll be brought before the pope on charges of heresy.
oh, my -- turning into a pumpkin after midnight sounds really, really good to me right now.
ReplyDeleteI love "overstayed the cocoon" & and all its subsequential unfoldings.
Youth is wasted on the young...
ReplyDeleteWisdom comes to those who wait.
Here's mine: JACK
Mine are here, two Peach-themed poems
ReplyDeleteI do like that God of dysfunctional delay.
ReplyDeleteholy cow!
ReplyDeleteso rallentandarized that I left the link I forgot to leave in the wrong place -- trying again!
http://another2doors.wordpress.com/2010/05/16/on-peaches/
Angie your first response was fine. Your name is linked.
ReplyDelete'Rallentandarized', Now, that's a good word
ReplyDeleteAngie.
Recipe
First rallentandarize your steak before..
Rall,
ReplyDeleteNow, I tried to be serious. But it hurt me demasiado ... now here is my second poem. Thanks for the prompt!
http://flaubert-poetrywithme.blogspot.com/2010/05/there-were-fruit-and-flowers-living-in.html
Ok this is my second attempt and I am sure this is a big mess. Thanks for the prompt Rall.
ReplyDeletePamela
http://flaubert-poetrywithme.blogspot.com/2010/05/there-were-fruit-and-flowers-living-in.html
May I come in now please, Rall?
ReplyDeleteHere's mine: http://vivinfrance.wordpress.com/2010/05/19/first-anything-for-pow-prompt-3/
Love the Cinderallentanda!
ReplyDeleteI didn't want to go down the 'first fruit' route... Who was it that said: Patience is a virgin!
Here's my Jim MacMurry
Oh Viv, it's not me,it's that bossy Miss
ReplyDeletePommeroy!
This is a beautiful poem Rall. Your prompt was great, awesome 4 lines from Ted Hughes. Here is my poem - http://umaathreya.blogsome.com/2010/05/18/green-berries/
ReplyDeleteThis is a fabulous poem, Rall, even if it isn't light and daffodil!
ReplyDeleteFor light and daffodil, here's mine:
http://melrosemusings.blogspot.com/2010/05/peach-pow-prompt-3.html
Thanks Derrick. It took three drafts.
ReplyDeleteI liked your poem Pam.
ReplyDeleteAmd here's one for Francis by Ted Hughes called
'Theology'
No,the serpent did not
Seduce Eve to the apple
All that's simply
Corruption of the facts
Adam ate the apple
Eve ate Adam.
The serpent ate Eve.
This is the dark intestine.
The serpent, meanwhile,
Sleeps his meal off in Paradise-
Smiling to hear
God's querulous calling.
Stan said it: we should be born old and spend our lives growing younger. Good post.
ReplyDeleteWelcome Dave. Maybe you can give the prompt a shot next week?
ReplyDeleteLove the Ted Hughes quote!
ReplyDeleteThis is a stunner, Rall! So many great images in your poem! You do powerful so well! I love coming here ... you and your merry band always inspire me!
http://herwordsbloomed.blogspot.com/2010/05/pow-3-ted-hughes-quote_16.html
And may I say Marianne,we are lucky to have
ReplyDeletea talented poet like you as part of the merry band.
Pamela, I couldn't get into your poem. Could you re-post the link?
ReplyDeleteRall,
ReplyDeleteI love your poem. But what happened to the daffodils? ;)
Pamela
Bloomin' daffodils would not come through Pam.
ReplyDeleteI blame you:)
Fun prompt. My first reaction to Ted's poem was that his peach experience represented an epiphany of sorts, which reminded me of this visit ~
ReplyDeletehttp://jdmackenzie.blogspot.com/2010/05/trevors-epiphany.html
Cheers, all.
JDM
Love the Hughes "Theology" Thanks, Rall
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ReplyDeletemm i think i was one of the ones
who rushed out early
and was pressed in print
also love the quoted theology poem
the snaky intestine
and the complicity of the humans
in causing the chaos =)
http://crankymango.blogspot.com/2010/05/first-cake.html
LucyChili has posted a poem and comment here but for some reason it will not publish. Sorry cranky mango. I hope the merry band visit you
ReplyDeleteand leave a comment.
Thanky'all for turning up.Catcha next week!
ReplyDeletehello rallentanda, really enjoy your weekly prompts have found them interesting and challenging tho i am always behind... so will just post it here for now...
ReplyDeletein a crouched position
staring back at you
the world becomes
second best
thanks look forward to getting in on time next week
You have the week to get your poem on. The only problem with that is the merry band tends to go 'walkabout' after about Thursday so you might not get as many comments if you don't get you poem in the first couple of days.
ReplyDeleteComments are some kind of reassurance that at least somebody has read your work and likes it. See ya next week P Pie.