Her wings were singed
the smell of burnt feathers
lingered for a long time
her maiden flight was too early
she peaked too soon
other attempts were made
but her confidence crushed
replaced by searing self doubt
enabled her to
manage airborne flight briefly
but then panic would set in
and she beating a hasty retreat to
the familiarity of her nest
failed once again
After a time she stopped trying to fly altogether
became landlocked dragging her reassuring
chains growing sleek and smug
always aware of
a niggling irritation
a dissatisfaction
emerging
like a virulent weed
robbing her of peace
She is driven to taking the flight
again
If she flies too close this time
she knows how to self immolate into
a whirling fireball flying through
the cosmos unlike poor Icarus
who fell plop straight into the sea
For all this time she had been misinformed
There is and was never anything to lose
Powerful metaphors here.
ReplyDelete"became landlocked dragging her reassuring
chains growing sleek and smug" is the antithesis of our rebellious instincts.
ViV
This one really strikes home - the last two lines circle back like pet vultures! Wonderful.
ReplyDeleteThankyou Blossombuds for your gracious and appreciative comments.
ReplyDeleteBOy, this sounds a bit like me..(among many others I am sure!) The ending really put it all in perspective, after all, what does anyone really have to lose?
ReplyDelete"For all this time she had been misinformed
ReplyDeleteThere is and was never anything to lose"
Ah, and that IS the secret. Bravo. Great image, too...hurt my eyes when you page opened up on my monitor. ;)
That last line is simply perfect.
ReplyDeleteLove the last stanza Rall, the attitude and spirit! The 'virulent weed robbing her of peace' - don't we all have this in us, pushing us? Nice poem.
ReplyDeleteThose 'ressuring chains' that many are so fond of should serve as a reminder that however free we think we are, the fact is that our 'free society' actually imprisons us.
ReplyDeleteToo true Stan...in reality the 'freedom'
ReplyDeletedies not exist and is only comparatively better
than less free societies.Our chains are padded
and camouflaged.
Yes Uma...off with their heads...and they sprout back again quickly.
ReplyDeleteThanks Linda and Cynthia.
Nothing at all! A wonderful poem that reminds me to keep trying.
ReplyDeleteWhat wise words you have written...I have moments like this in my life. Beautiful poem!
ReplyDeleteThanks Mama Zen, Sandy and Sweet Gale.
ReplyDeleteThe essence lies in last two lines.. very well wrapped up.. a beautiful take on the prompt..
ReplyDeletegreat extended metaphor! and it doesn't lose steam -- great job keeping the momentum going!
ReplyDeleteClever lass to rewrite the classic, find the new truth. (Which lass? Why both, of course.)
ReplyDeleteSuperb Rall simply superb!
ReplyDeletePamela
Awesome!
ReplyDeletehelp me rewrite Greek tragedies
Also, please do hop on the Monday Poetry Train
panic and fear can be so deadly.... and then that last stanza she's back and driven...what a spirit...
ReplyDeleteThanks Ramesh Guatami Pamela and Pie
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