Rallentanda

Rallentanda

Monday, December 9, 2019

Landay Poem



he served her at the check out counter
a young  delightful refugee in need of a chat

twas a large order so there was time
she could see he enjoyed the encounter very much

rude impatient customer complains
her instant rapier response hits the mark hard

dark mutters and murmurs chill the air
they both laugh say goodbye she knows she'll see him again

 Imaginary Garden with Real Toads



Written for Sannas’s prompt ~ May the fire in our hearts keep burning as though there is no end ~ Our challenge is to write a Landay (or a series of Landai) on a subject matter of our liking.
“It’s a traditional Afghan form which consists of a single couplet.
There are nine syllables in the first line and thirteen syllables in the second. These short poems typically address themes of love, grief, homeland, war, and separation.”


8 comments:

  1. When young you see possibilities in almost everyone you meet. It is amazing what meaningful stories can be told in so few words.

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  2. Standing in the queue there is no reward in patience as this story informs.

    Happy Tuesday

    Much✏love

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  3. My goodness this is good!❤️ Especially love; "dark mutters and murmurs chill the air they both laugh say goodbye she knows she'll see him again." Thank you so much for writing to my final prompt!😍🌹🌷

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  4. A hopeful encounter...an interjection of harsh words. Thankfully your ending promises a friendship will still grow.

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  5. I vaguely remember when every encounter seemed promising. Smiles. Loved these landai.

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  6. This poem is very much in the moment, which is the best moment to be in. 😊

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