Rallentanda

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Tuesday, March 2, 2010

Clarrie's Cornered RWP 116

This week's prompt is photo ' Charon ' by h koppdelaney








Clarrie's Cornered

this is my comeuppance
washed up on a poetry blog boat
swallowing oceans of verbal sludge
onanistic tortured angst ridden verse
deafened by the sound of breast beating
headed for the VIP section
of agony aunt's poetry hell

a cube in San Bruno looks good
a beach at Byron looks better
Too late
I've overdosed on classical allusion
overblown lexicon and linguistic flagellation

what's worse is that bitch Fairy Moans
nicked my Mardi Gras outfit
an art piece eight months in the making
and buried me in a three piece suit
deliberately making me look like
the Reverend Fred Nile
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20 comments:

  1. Tess KincaidMarch 3, 2010 at 5:48 AM

    Great word "comeuppance". Okay, who's Fred Nile?

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  2. rallentandaMarch 3, 2010 at 6:52 AM

    Willow,the answer to this is in my post on RWP #116 Time of your Life.

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  3. Paul OakleyMarch 3, 2010 at 4:51 PM

    I've seen pictures from the Sydney Gay Mardi Gras for decades. Seems like quite a fun party, eh?

    Fun poem, rallentanda! Sorry your costume got nicked. :) These lines especially were grabbers:

    washed up on a poetry blog boat
    swallowing oceans of verbal sludge

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  4. flaubertMarch 3, 2010 at 6:37 PM

    Rall,
    Love the last stanza. But who is the bitch Fairy Moans anyway? huh? Excellent work with this photo.I know how much you love the Reverend Nile, lol. Thanks for sharing.
    Pamela

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  5. rallentandaMarch 3, 2010 at 9:57 PM

    Her real name is pheromones .She just wants to make herself sound more exotic.

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  6. AnonymousMarch 3, 2010 at 10:41 PM

    poor babe, the good rev sounds like a fate worse than death.
    as to linguistic flagellation, got to say I resemble that remark.
    love the idea of the nicked outfit

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  7. Julie Jordan ScottMarch 4, 2010 at 3:01 AM

    Just when I was afraid all the poems would be too sad, you made me laugh and oooh and ahhh... these lines were my favorite:

    >>> I've overdosed on classical allusion
    >>> overblown lexicon and linguistic flagellation

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  8. UnknownMarch 4, 2010 at 4:58 AM

    Hi Rall,

    Funny. I looked up your Rev. Nile and he seems a nice chap. As for the 'oceans of verbal sludge' and 'angst ridden verse', maybe you shouldn't read mine! Nice hairdo!

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  9. rallentandaMarch 4, 2010 at 5:34 AM

    Glad you like the hairdo.
    I believe big hair is very popular in Egypt!

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  10. Cynthia ShortMarch 4, 2010 at 5:34 AM

    You will never be "washed up"!

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  11. Raven's Wing PoetryMarch 4, 2010 at 10:02 AM

    Seconding Cynthia. This piece made me laugh in what I expected to be a long line of sad poetry (maybe to some extent mine included). Great job this week.

    -Nicole

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  12. Matthew QuinnMarch 4, 2010 at 10:12 AM

    Fun poem.

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  13. Wayne PitchkoMarch 4, 2010 at 11:24 AM

    nicely done....grreat hairdooooooooo...Vancouver has a great fun gay parade also....without the Rev.

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  14. rob kistnerMarch 4, 2010 at 11:43 AM

    This kicks a** R... I loved it! ;)

    ...rob

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  15. Wayne PitchkoMarch 5, 2010 at 7:52 PM

    THANKS for your comments Rall...that amigo was and still is an amazing guy...we took him and his son out for dinner in Havana...had a couple of rum....while his son went over the sea wall on gthe malecon and did a little fishing...his dad had a wee nap on the sea wall.

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  16. rallentandaMarch 5, 2010 at 10:03 PM

    That's great Wayne.Also congratulations on all
    the gold at the winter olympics!

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  17. Erin DavisMarch 5, 2010 at 11:46 PM

    I loved this--it was a kick in my expectations for serious, creepy responses to the image.

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  18. rallentandaMarch 6, 2010 at 2:10 AM

    Of course there is a place for serious but I
    am sickened by the consistent creepy self indulgent angst that certain poets dole out week after week.
    However as I 've said before my views are
    not popular.Chacun a son gout.

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  19. Tumblewords:March 6, 2010 at 11:58 AM

    I laughed til I cried. You seriously pull some humor from the upright and uptight.

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  20. rallentandaMarch 6, 2010 at 4:12 PM

    Glad you share my sense of humour blossombuds
    It gives me enormous pleasure to think I can make someone laugh.x

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