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Sunday, June 6, 2010

POW PROMPT 6



POW PROMPT 6
I have written two centos based on Bukowski/Shakespeare. I will put one on now as an example in case anyone has not attempted one of these before. Remember to acknowledge all sources,no words of your own, and ideally no breaks in lines. My other poem gets posted on Wednesday.
Do you see, what, what?

It's midday Wednesday . Here is my other cento as promised. Looking forward to reading everyone's poems. The ones I have seen so far have been fantastic. I think the standard is very high and possibly the best to date.

BILL WILL KILL
What I am really worried about is
that my editor publisher might retire.
I wont blame him for getting out
Rough winds do shake the
darling buds of May
Will I have to seek other promulgators?
That fellow in the Russian
fur hat?
Or that beast in the East
With all that hair
in his ears
'Mr Chinaski, all your work
must now be submitted in
Rondo form
and
typed
triple -spaced on rice
paper '
keep it
sail it up your
ass
The first thing we do
let's kill all the lawyers
Well, John, if it happens
enjoy your divertissement
into plant husbandry
for he today that sheds his
blood with me
shall be my brother
and thank you for locating me
somewhere between
alcoholism and madness
Hooray Hooray say the roses
today is blamesday poem
for my 43rd burthday
and we are as red as blood
as the pointsettias drip in the sun
Hooray say the roses
I laugh not out loud

Sources
Shakespeare
Shakespeare Sonnet no 18
Henry V St Crispin's Day Speech
Henry V1 Pt 2 Act 4 Scene 2

Bukowski
Trollius and Trellises
Eat Your Heart Out
Having the flu with nothing to do
Hooray say the roses
Poem for my 43rd Birthday
one thity-six a.m.




Charles and Will Chill
I see you drinking at a fountain with tiny
blue hands, no your hands are not tiny
they are small, and the fountain is in France
All the perfume of Arabia will not sweeten this little hand
where you wrote me that last letter and
I loved you
like a man loves a woman he never touches
only writes to, keeps little photographs of
Do you think I am easier to be played on than a pipe?
Some Cupid kills with arrows, some with traps
Next time, take my left arm or a fifty
but not my poems:
I'm no Shakespeare
I'm selling rhyme and life and line
and I sat there trying to explain
that I wasn't really a poet in the ordinary sense
My words fly up, my thoughts remain below:
pretty soon everyone was yawning
but as God said
crossing his legs,
I see where I have made plenty of poets
but not so very much
poetry
lost another reader
Camus
always
pissed
me
off
I lose 2 or 3
each week
when sorrows come they come not single spies
but in battalions
fine.
let'em go back to
Kafka

SOURCES
Shakespeare
Macbeth Act V Scene 1
Hamlet Act 3 Scene 2
Hamlet Act 3 Scene 3 100-103
Hamlet Act 4 Scene 5
Much Ado About Nothing

Bukowski
An Almost Made Up Poem
To The Whore Who Took My Poems
I Am Visited By An Editor And A Poet
I like your books
Paris


43 comments:

  1. This is brilliant, Rall! The sentences flow together beautifully ... and what a grand prompt! I feel rather smug to be writing centos and reading Bukowski! Very avant-garde for little old me!

    I'm working away on my cento. I keep changing it.

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  2. This is brilliant, Rall! The sentences flow together beautifully ... and what a grand prompt! I feel rather smug to be writing centos and reading Bukowski! Very avant-garde for little old me!

    I'm working away on my cento. I keep changing it.

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  3. Good for you Marianne!It is not easy to get the mesh...you have to find the right lines but then you get to read a lot of Bukowski poems. I chose him because his poems lend themselves to this type of format and offer a lot of potential humour which you of course know I am keen on.Feel smug..we are a very cool for a bunch of golden oldies!

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  4. Without looking up the reference can anyone spot the five Shakespeare quotes? Three are easy, but the other two, maybe not so.

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  5. This is great, Rall, but I see you've stolen some of "my" lines!!! Worry not, (as if) my poem is neither as long nor as good!

    Here's my go at finding Will's words. How'd I do?

    All the perfume of Arabia will not sweeten this little hand
    Do you think I am easier to be played on than a pipe?
    Some Cupid kills with arrows, some with traps
    My words fly up, my thoughts remain below:
    when sorrows come they come not single spies
    but in battalions

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  6. I'll reread it more thoroughly, but I had a TOUGH time spotting the Shakespeare. BRAVO! Seamless, indeed. Onward to give it a better look....

    - Dina

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  7. Derrick
    'Sir,if you spend word for word with me I shall make your wit bankrupt...you have an exchequer of words'
    ( and all correct too!)
    Two Gentlemen of Verona Act 2 scene 1V

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  8. Thanks for turning me on to Bukowski.
    I continue groaning

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  9. Glad you like Bulowski....I think he's great!

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  10. I'll take a stab at the possible Shakespeare...

    All the perfume of Arabia will not sweeten this little hand
    Do you think I am easier to be played on than a pipe?
    Some Cupid kills with arrows, some with traps
    My words fly up, my thoughts remain below
    when sorrows come they come not single spies

    Do tell me if I'm right or wrong, as I was proud that I did NOT look them up, at least.

    Your cento is a seamless beauty, Rall...a lovely whisp of a tornado-shaped poem that combines, Bukowski's brisk brusqueness with Shakespeare's drama. Your prompt was inspiring, as I haven't taken time to re-read Bukowski since...ah, I'll age myself. My attempt is here, along with sources:

    http://lindagoin.com/2010/shakespeare-and-bukowski-dance.html

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  11. Full marks to Linda who did not look anything up! Whoo hoo!You're a bit early with your poem. You're Goin' a bit fast:)

    I am putting another one up on Wednesday. Have another go with the Shakespeare?

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  12. Rall - my apologies. I thought it was Tuesday here, hence Wednesday there. I'm SO screwed up. Next time, just yell at me. I can take it. Thanks for the visit, though...there are nine Shakespeare lines in mine, btw...the fourth stanza contains four of those nine lines. =)

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  13. Apologies not necessary Linda. Your enthusiasm
    is applauded. No yelling here Linda. This blog adopts the softly softly approach.We are all delicate violets here. Any belligerence gets the silent frozen treatment.
    'Freeze freeZe thou bitter sky.Thou dost not bite so nigh.'

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  14. I'm sorry I'm early, Rall, but I'm busy tomorrow - off to UK for my graduation. At least I won't be here to take the brickbats!

    Sonnet of 15 lines,
    A Patchwork poem

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  15. This is real great work Rall, they two seem to seamlessly fit together.

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  16. Two Gentlemen of Verona, if my memory serves...

    All the perfume of Arabia will not sweeten this little hand
    Do you think I am easier to be played on than a pipe?
    Some Cupid kills with arrows, some with traps
    My words fly up, my thoughts remain below:
    when sorrows come they come not single spies
    but in battalions

    Beautifully woven tapestry, his words and yours...

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  17. Thank you Titanium but there are no words of mine in this poem...Shakespeare and Bukowski.

    Thank you Uma.

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  18. Thy sting is not so sharp
    Thy sting is not so sharp

    Softly violeting.

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  19. Shakespeare in the first, is fairly easy to detect, but much more subtle in the second. Both read fluently; both are excellent examples of the form.
    I only had time on Saturday morning to 'reseach' and posted Sat arvo, to see how much attention I could attract to POW.
    Here goes: URBANE HOSTILITIES

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  20. Thank you Stan and nice of you to promote POW.
    I only thought I would capture about 5 people so as long as the standard remains high and 5 people turn up...it's all roses! Hooray say the roses as Lazlo Urge would say!I love that name Lazlo Urge.I actually know who Lazlo Urge is but I'm not telling.

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  21. Rall, brilliant as always, first in prompts and next in your own outstanding poems.

    Thank you for turning me on to centos and Charles (Will, I got in one of failing American middle schools). Thanks for yet again introducing me to new forms and terms, this time the blamesday poem.

    Tonight I am grieving at:
    Love's Lament
    http://jdmackenzie.blogspot.com/2010/06/loves-lament.html

    Cheers to you all.

    JDM

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  22. this was a great prompt, Rall! how astute to foresee how well these two poets would mesh together. your poems are fab; if I had to pick one to take to a deserted island with me, I think I'd pick "charles and will chill" because I love this:

    I see you drinking at a fountain with tiny
    blue hands, no your hands are not tiny
    they are small, and the fountain is in France

    thanks -- this was fun!
    http://another2doors.wordpress.com/2010/06/05/as-the-sparrow-sixes/

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  23. To the Black Douglas
    Grazie per il commento generoso amore mio!
    We are going Italian next week so I am getting into the mood:)

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  24. I thought it was fun too Angie. Thanks for your comment.I hope you're feeling Italian for next week!

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  25. I googled Lazlo Urge and it led me to Les Murray - he who you mean?

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  26. Yep...he is a Hungarian Sporting commentator with quite a thick accent on a multicultural
    tv chanel who calls himself Les Murray.He is so obviously a Lazlo, sort of like a Maurice Chevalier calling himself Kev Brown.

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  27. I am about to switch everything off and hide it under layers of taped dustsheet, as my dear husband is planning major demolition/changes/murderous plaster dust in my workroom during my absence until next Wednesday.

    I've enjoyed all the posts so far, and congratulate everyone on doing it properly, producing terrific poems. Have a good week all you poets.

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  28. Rall
    Both fit together perfectly!Thanks for this prompt!
    Pamela

    http://flaubert-poetrywithme.blogspot.com/2010/06/swimming-on-linoleum-pow-prompt-6-cento.html

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  29. Hello again, Rall. Another good 'un from you - but should we expect other?! I'm beginning to worry about these Italian rumours!

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  30. Don't worry Derrick! No need to be nervous.
    Just sit in a large foaming hot bubble bath with a plate of spaghetti carbonara and a glass
    of valpolicella and terza rimas will come flying out of your ears without difficulty!

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  31. Ciao! Here's my cento. I love spaghetti carbonara!

    http://herwordsbloomed.blogspot.com/2010/06/pow-prompt-6-cento.html

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  32. Okay, you're really good at this, Rall!

    Here's mine: http://mypoeticlicense.wordpress.com/2010/06/05/charles-and-herbie/

    - Dina
    P.S. Hey, sorry about my previous use of that "h" word. But, if this is a "lesson", you do make it wicked fun...

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  33. Yep Italian food is the ultimate Marianne.

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  34. Thanks Dina. I'm having a problem getting your comment on to this site

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  35. It's a bit daunting to try this after reading how well you mash them up, but Bukowski and Shakespeare do make a very interesting pairing. I managed to use 3 poems from each:
    Charles and Will explain love's inevitable decline

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  36. Oh you're on...thanks Dina ...the idea is to enjoy and have fun while learning something new at the same time!

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  37. Francis will probably dazzle us with a very superior sprinkling of Italian in his poem next week. Check his cento out. I'm still laughing.

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  38. Still chuckling over the more recent one, Rall. This has been good fun, and--pardon me for saying it--educational. You make it look easy.
    I have tried. Lord knows I’ve tried. but I can’t seem to manage both a true cento and a poem in the same space. So I tossed it to the wind and came down with a new form on top of the cento CHARLIE'S BONES CASCADE (the explanation of Cascade is at the end)

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  39. Rall, I loved doing this. Thanks for this prompt. Here is my cento - http://umaathreya.blogsome.com/2010/06/09/its-night-youre-lost/

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  40. There's a lovely relentless pace about this that compels you onwards to the end. Particularly liked the last one.

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  41. Thank you all for entering into the spirit of this and making it such a fun prompt. It is going to be hard to top this one. Stan lives in the land of smiles and I would like to think that this is the blog of smiles.
    See ya next week possums!

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