3WW...zenith tactic naughty
all that naughty talk of
pungent durian fruity fragrance
a tactic designed to drive her
out of her beigeness
split torn flashing
glints of red and fire
by setting alight her wings
he has reached the zenith
of his ultimate control and power
he knows
the lamb will now lead herself
to the slaughter
Good images. I enjoy reading poetry and seeing the pictures in the words, but can't write it! lol
ReplyDeleteOf course you can write poetry. Put on the music..dance...and the words will overflow out of your heart.
ReplyDeleteThis is a powerful piece. With the holidays just past, it makes me think of commercialism. I suspect that wasn't your intent. I find it interesting how poems can have different impacts on different people. Great poem.
ReplyDeletewonderful descriptive and so true how some people think
ReplyDeleteI'm rooting for the lamb.
ReplyDeleteGreat use of three words. Please read my attempt.
Oooh; shocking imagery and a closing that made me gasp!
ReplyDeleteNice read.
ReplyDeleteenjoyed your poem Rall....thanks
ReplyDeleteLove the poem with the pic. Cheers.
ReplyDeletenice...great imagery...a bit of wickedness..smiles.
ReplyDeleteSuch a vivid poem! Great take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteinteresting perspective.
ReplyDeleteHe is kidding himself! He is the one that is hooked.
ReplyDelete'driving herself out of the beige'..wonderful..leapt out of me..and took me to my own beige place..Jae
ReplyDeleteYikes! poor little lamb :(
ReplyDeleteSuper-charged lines Rall! Happy New Poems for 2012.
ReplyDeleteBest wishes Isabel x
Thank you Isabel.
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