i watch the sullen expressions the cruelty the breaking of trust the brutal exchanges and scurry away to cry somewhere quiet reinforced that 'belonging' is dangerous
You poem is powerful, and speaks strongly to the pain of trying to connect.
Mine, on the other hand, was written specifically in response to your 3WW comment that "No one can make a happy poem out of these words!" I could, and I did!
Even being slightly unconventional often makes a person untrustworthy. This is especially so with writers who must seek that individuality of expression to achieve. I wonder whether you were thinking about that when you wrote this telling post.
You poem is powerful, and speaks strongly to the pain of trying to connect.
ReplyDeleteMine, on the other hand, was written specifically in response to your 3WW comment that "No one can make a happy poem out of these words!" I could, and I did!
http://www.tonynoland.com/2012/01/wednesday-limerick-brutal-sullen-trust.html
I like that there are many ways you can interpret this. For me, it's a child hiding during a parent's fight.
ReplyDeleteBelonging is dangerous no one is owned and survives being a partnership works better,:)
ReplyDeleteVery sad piece. I hope she finds somewhere to belong.
ReplyDeleteEven being slightly unconventional often makes a person untrustworthy. This is especially so with writers who must seek that individuality of expression to achieve. I wonder whether you were thinking about that when you wrote this telling post.
ReplyDeleteThis is sad, but there's a lot of truth to it. Excellent write.
ReplyDeleteReally nice stuff here. I felt your words, the hope - and the dispair.
ReplyDeleteExcellent, creative use of the 3 words...
ReplyDeleteI like what you did with the 3 words Rall...thanks for sharing
ReplyDeleteBelonging and loving certainly come with risk. Great use of this weeks words.
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