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Friday, May 2, 2014

Persephone



A Shakespearean Sonnet for dverse

her hair flowed freely as she did her dance
beneath the clouds in dainty seamless grace
admired by smitten swains her form enhanced
with golden ringlets blowing in her face
she drove them mostly mad unto distraction
her ink blue eyes could pierce a milk white heart
to purple hue love arrows shot in  action
from  cupid's bow frieze drawn and poised in art
the slate grey sky did split the earth and rumble
a gnarled black hand grabbed tight and pulled her down
to darkness had-es bleak with rolling tumble
where no bird lived in realm of moans and frown
she ate the seeds and acted out of kindness
not knowing that she'd sealed her fate with blindness


14 comments:

  1. A classical subject in a classical form. There's something funny about your meter in line 8, but your rhymes are really good.

    Well penned ... smiles

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  2. Nah...line 8 is fine..it is a bit obtuse.
    You have had one too many sonnets methinks you wee scallywag!

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  3. Such classic beauty.. Really nice with classic content..

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  4. bittersweat....beautiful opening
    a bit scarier ending on this one...

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  5. A classical is a whiff of freshness Rallentanda! Different from the rest! That makes it stand out! Great!

    Hank

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  6. A beautiful version of the myth, all in color and arty poses. A narrative sonnet! Nice.

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  7. nice, a very classic feel

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  8. This is so lovely. Nature in its glory.

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    1. This is the story of Persephone who was captured by the king of the underworld(Hades) She is allowed back to earth for half of the year ( Spring Summer) but must return to Hades for the other half ( Autumn Winter).
      A D Hope wrote a lovely poem about Persephone.At least I thought it was lovely when I last read it at school.

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  9. Love your verses...I like your take on Persephone

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  10. Nicely done. ( I was at a works function on Thursday night - an AGM followed by dinner and a trivia night (I live the high life). One of the trivia questions was 'how many lines in a sonnet?'. I was the only one at our table that knew. Most said 12.)

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  11. That's what is wrong with our society..people are not informed about things that really matter like sonnets. Glad to see you getting out and about,mixing it with the beau monde and n tweakers:)

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    1. No tweakers there although Twiddlenips the Troll has been lurking at NOAS.

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