a flower was offered to me
red and rich with promise
1 step forward
i gave seven sensible reasons
why i should not accept it
2 steps backwards
making light of my refusal
all the while
quick quick
secretly
wanting so much
to make that flower mine
slow
so we dance round each other
who knows
if we will ever master the steps
and make it to the end
Midweek Motif PU
Excellent. Oh, yes, that is the dance. Thank you for capturing it!
ReplyDeleteSuch stunning play on words :D
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written.
Lots of love,
Sanaa
I LOVE this....that dance we do around each other.....secretly wanting to accept, too fearful or "sensible" to do so. So well expressed.
ReplyDeletelove this.
ReplyDeleteAfter that first refusal I think he was teasing you just to keep you there. Delightful.
ReplyDeleteNicely said. I like the open-endedness. I enjoyed Fred and Rita, too.
ReplyDeleteThis is great. Very creative.
ReplyDeleteI really like this:
"i gave seven sensible reasons
why i should not accept it"
love this one with steps together...
ReplyDeleteWhat a clever poem Rall - i am sure you will - and if not well then i am certain you dance how you want..where and with much joy
ReplyDeleteA mix of spice and romance.
ReplyDeleteOh the dance of romance. Fun, intriguing and nice. Enjoyed this poem Rail.
ReplyDeleteFlying and dancing are always executed perfectly without practice, in dreams. Real life takes a bit more work and a lot more patience.
ReplyDeleteHmmmm, mature love is full of caution, is it not? It's always good to accept the flower and hang the consequences, Rall! Great write!
ReplyDeleteOK then:)
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