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Saturday, February 6, 2010

Blue Eyeshadow


This cento is based on Lily Brett's 5th collection of poetry
In Her Strapless Dresses and Mud In My Tears
RWP Mini Challenge#3

Blue Eyeshadow

In Carlton
where I grew
up

the streets
were full
of Italians

each Saturday
we went
to the Victoria market

I feel
so old
and big

to be
crying
for my mother

I should
have felt
this

when
she was
alive

Cabarets
were her favourite
places

she was
beautiful
and so seductive

she mascara'd
her eyes
and painted her lips

awash
in a wild scent
she went out

all the men
danced
with her

and
my father
danced

with
the wives
who were left behind

8 comments:

  1. There is so much going on..images just flashing by..I want the next movie!!

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  2. Oh, I like this one, Rall. (Not that I haven't liked the others!).

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  3. I like how the last stanza lets us see both people in the relationship.

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  4. Poignant, powerful and it reads so much like an "original" poem, perfect and precisely woven.

    Sorry for pouring on the alliteration there...

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  5. This work was based on the following poems

    In Her Strapless Dresses pg 23
    In Carlton pg 52 pg 54
    The Welts pg 57 pg 58
    She Came Alive pg 25 pg 26

    I like alliteration... poetic device that requires skill.Thanks Julie.

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  6. I really love the imagery here. Nice! I love the colour blue.

    Pamela

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  7. Nicely done! I see how you worked well with both short and longer lines from her work. Also reads very much like an original piece.

    -Nicole

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