
This cento is based on Lily Brett's 5th collection of poetry
In Her Strapless Dresses and Mud In My Tears
RWP Mini Challenge#3
Blue Eyeshadow
In Carlton
where I grew
up
the streets
were full
of Italians
each Saturday
we went
to the Victoria market
I feel
so old
and big
to be
crying
for my mother
I should
have felt
this
when
she was
alive
Cabarets
were her favourite
places
she was
beautiful
and so seductive
she mascara'd
her eyes
and painted her lips
awash
in a wild scent
she went out
all the men
danced
with her
and
my father
danced
with
the wives
who were left behind
There is so much going on..images just flashing by..I want the next movie!!
ReplyDeleteOh, I like this one, Rall. (Not that I haven't liked the others!).
ReplyDeleteI like how the last stanza lets us see both people in the relationship.
ReplyDeletePoignant, powerful and it reads so much like an "original" poem, perfect and precisely woven.
ReplyDeleteSorry for pouring on the alliteration there...
This work was based on the following poems
ReplyDeleteIn Her Strapless Dresses pg 23
In Carlton pg 52 pg 54
The Welts pg 57 pg 58
She Came Alive pg 25 pg 26
I like alliteration... poetic device that requires skill.Thanks Julie.
Another one coming up Lyn!
ReplyDeleteI really love the imagery here. Nice! I love the colour blue.
ReplyDeletePamela
Nicely done! I see how you worked well with both short and longer lines from her work. Also reads very much like an original piece.
ReplyDelete-Nicole