Enjoyed the music and the wordlish summer.
Hello Rall!Concise as ever and very appropriate. It's lashing with rain here! Haven't heard 10cc in a long time!
Woven tightly - great work! I liked the reggae that accompanied that dry, heat of summer. Just the recipe for waning patience.
Rall, I love the title and 'silk stream of water.' This is one hot summer!
This has an almost haikuishness to it in its spare, evocative, sensual presentation! Wonderful touch, pairing it with 10cc.Particularly like "silk stream of water." I can see it, coming out of the hose, and feel its silkiness. Nice, rallentanda!BTW, love the new look!
Good to see you back . . .
car horns honktempers zeroedpatience blown Every drivers nightmare! Just give me the hose water sprinkle... :)
Loved your 'Summer' poem... is that a true picture of you???
Wonderfully tight like the tempers in those cars, rising like the heat. Great use of words and spaces. Elizabeth
You packed them in so tight, but still managed to make sense of the words.
nicely packed with a punch Rall...thanks for this
You're spare and clear--and so brightly dressed!
Patience blown is absolutely right when the heats gone on way too long!
I relate!dances of the zeroes
summer does test patienceMy Big Tent Poem
I'm always short of heat, but recognize the feeling here from hearing others who are on hot overfill after two days of summer. Nicely rendered.
How true, the relentless summer heat makes me VERY grumpy!
Thank you for the comments.
Enjoyed the music and the wordlish summer.
ReplyDeleteHello Rall!
ReplyDeleteConcise as ever and very appropriate. It's lashing with rain here! Haven't heard 10cc in a long time!
Woven tightly - great work! I liked the reggae that accompanied that dry, heat of summer. Just the recipe for waning patience.
ReplyDeleteRall, I love the title and 'silk stream of water.' This is one hot summer!
ReplyDeleteThis has an almost haikuishness to it in its spare, evocative, sensual presentation! Wonderful touch, pairing it with 10cc.
ReplyDeleteParticularly like "silk stream of water." I can see it, coming out of the hose, and feel its silkiness. Nice, rallentanda!
BTW, love the new look!
Good to see you back . . .
ReplyDeletecar horns honk
ReplyDeletetempers zeroed
patience blown
Every drivers nightmare! Just give me the hose water sprinkle... :)
Loved your 'Summer' poem... is that a true picture of you???
ReplyDeleteWonderfully tight like the tempers in those cars, rising like the heat. Great use of words and spaces.
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
You packed them in so tight, but still managed to make sense of the words.
ReplyDeletenicely packed with a punch Rall...thanks for this
ReplyDeleteYou're spare and clear--
ReplyDeleteand so brightly dressed!
Patience blown is absolutely right when the heats gone on way too long!
ReplyDeleteI relate!
ReplyDeletedances of the zeroes
summer does test patience
ReplyDeleteMy Big Tent Poem
I'm always short of heat, but recognize the feeling here from hearing others who are on hot overfill after two days of summer. Nicely rendered.
ReplyDeleteHow true, the relentless summer heat makes me VERY grumpy!
ReplyDeleteThank you for the comments.
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