warm breath steams my specs
I trudge in the deep thick snow
my gloves covered in crunched ice
what is this white death
devoid of colour and warmth
devil's dry on ice
snowmen in striped scarves
unfriendly spooky and stitched
stare vacant and fixed
I
a minnow astray
in a shark's pool out of depth
out of swing kilter
am shadowed by dreams
of pointy umbrella leaves
in sad dream spun nights
of sunshine and palms
of sea spray and mango trees
please please take me back
Rall this is beautiful!
ReplyDeleteNothing flimsy here :)
Pam
The snowy ones are kinda scary, Rall! My favourite is:
ReplyDeleteam shadowed by dreams
of pointy umbrella leaves
in sad dream spun nights
They're all wonderful: you've blended some lovely words in these senryu. I itched to join dream and spun into dreamspun, because of the way it reads aloud.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your kind comment on mine.
Struth, I thought I cooked up a batch of haikus
ReplyDeletebut I've gone done and senryued miself!Best control that itch Viv,it's a spiral downwards!
This is beautiful, Rall. I love it, especially the plea at the end. Bravo!
ReplyDelete~Brenda
Here are two HAIKU:
ReplyDeleteRallentanda, I LAIKU.
But it's a bummer
when it's your summer
we're working on senryu
about melting snow
A celebration of "la difference" can be found HERE
PS Great POW this week! Thank you.
If you go back, the last thing you'll be dreaming about is snow.
ReplyDeleteThanks everyone for your comments. I have just finished I have just finished A Biography of Christine Stead by Hazel Rowley. Boy, what a life!If you skim all the too detailed turgid sections it is a fascinating read.
ReplyDeleteWonderful, rallentanda! I love your snow scenes but have to agree with Derrick that they are "kinda scary." Especially the snowmen. I hope winter is treating you reasonably down under!
ReplyDeleteA very enjoyable read!
ReplyDeletenow it is there, now it isn't
Paul ,we don't have many grey sky days here even if it is cold... our winters are not cold by your standards..so shouldn't complain but will...winter always brings on the slight blues...a northern winter would finish me off at this age I'm sure!
ReplyDeleteYour snow scenes gave me literal chills, despite our HOT summer right now. And when I think about it, snowmen DO generally look pretty unfriendly! STIFF anyway...
ReplyDeleteThe haiku were a nice change of pace. I'll always prefer summer scenes to winter... I'm glad ours is still several months off.
ReplyDeleteYour blues make for good reading, I liked especially "devil's dry on ice" ... makes me think there should be an ad campaign for a certain liquor that packs a cold punch.
ReplyDelete(Thanks for playing along!)
They say to be careful what you wish for. I'm back Stan and today lying ill febrile in a damp house in the monsoon I don't want to be here.
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