Season of mists and mellow fruitfulness,
Close bosom-friend of the maturing sun;
Conspiring with him how to load and bless
With fruit the vines that round the thatch-eves run;
To bend with apples the moss’d cottage-trees,
And fill all fruit with ripeness to the core;
To swell the gourd, and plump the hazel shells
With a sweet kernel; to set budding more,
And still more, later flowers for the bees,
Until they think warm days will never cease,
For summer has o’er-brimm’d their clammy cells.
Who hath not seen thee oft amid thy store?
Sometimes whoever seeks abroad may find
Thee sitting careless on a granary floor
Thy hair soft-lifted by the winnowing wind;
Or on a half-reap’d furrow sound asleep,
Drowsed with the fume of poppies, while thy hook
Spares the next swath and all its twined flowers:
And sometimes like a gleaner thou dost keep
Steady thy laden head across a brook;
Or by a cider-press, with patient look,
Thou watchest the last oozings hours by hours
Where are the songs of Spring? Ay, where are they?
Think not of them, thou hast thy music too,--
While barred clouds bloom the soft-dying day,
And touch the stubble-plains with rosy hue;
Then in a wailful choir the small gnats mourn
Among the river sallows, borne aloft
Or sinking as the light wind lives or dies;
And full-grown lambs loud bleat from hilly bourn;
Hedge-crickets sing; and now with treble soft
The redbreast whistles from a garden-croft,
And gathering swallows twitter in the skies.
Autumn - Jorge Cardenas
PLUMP HAZEL
close bosom friend
conspiring
to bend
plump hazel
sweet and warm
sound asleep
drowsed with the fume of poppies
with patient look
thou watchest
hours by hours
a wailful choir
small gnats mourn
loud crickets sing
and now
soft whistles from twitter
Midweek Motif - Poets United
A very beautiful outcome of the experiment. I think it is called a found poem
ReplyDeleteOh my! Clever and worthy of the original!
ReplyDeleteAn erasure poem is a form of found poetry where you are supposed to black out the words you don't use. As I am technically challenged I don't know how to do this on a computer, so I just underlined the words I used instead. In an erasure poem you have to use the words in a chronological sequence making a new meaning, a new poem. This one was difficult but I am getting hooked on these so I'll be writing more :) Glad you enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteThis was delicious to read! I love it!
ReplyDeleteWOW! I think I like your poem more than the original. Very cool!
ReplyDeleteI remember a prompt once to write an erasure poem. This came out wonderful, you have selected some key words to create your own magic.
ReplyDeleteYou end this poem on a wry, humorous note. Made my day!
ReplyDeleteHa...glad you got the twitter reference.
DeleteWow...nicely done, Rall! Nice technique! A time to explore outside and enjoy all of what nature has to offer....
ReplyDeletewow very cleverly done You destiled it in a very original poem
ReplyDeleteLove what you did with your erasure poem Rall! You created a lovely poem here!
ReplyDeleteBeautifully done erasure poem, Rall!
ReplyDeleteGreat form of writing and a delightful outcome indeed.
ReplyDeleteReally nice, your found poem
ReplyDeletemuch love...
Now that is a clever device, Rall. I had to smile as I read it. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you for your visits to my blog, they are appreciated. I have had very little spare time lately and as such it was hard to keep up with my visits. Things are easing now :-)