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Tuesday, February 6, 2018

Mid Week Motif - Poets United





i remember it
vividly
we saw her
at the bus stop
we knew her

it was fairly obvious
she was doing it tough
her husband had run off
to give new meaning to his life
with a woman 20 years younger
and left her with nothing

we should help her
give her a job

the corners of his mouth
curled with contempt
aghast


his outrage at this suggestion
was punctuated by an incredulous  sneer  
the same one he affected when
the accountant dozing off  next to him at a concert
broke thunderous wind like a trombone solo
in the slow movt of the schubert symphony
at the opera house


how would you feel if
she were your mother or daughter
we should help her
give her a job at least

my mother and daughter
would never be stupid enough
to find themselves

in that situation
he said
with the demeanour
of the smug entitled prick
that he was

the final nail
driven firmly into
the coffin
of our relationship






14 comments:

  1. This world is teeming with judgmental beings. Ugh.

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  2. Oh yes, that was a good one to get out of!

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  3. It seems that final nail was easy to hammer. Good for her!

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  4. Yes, that would do it, for certain. One day, hopefully, he might discover how easy it is, from one day to the next, to find oneself in an utterly unexpected and devastating situation. Your poem is a wonderful character study. I could actually SEE his facial expression.

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  5. "thunderous wind like a trombone solo" a powerful fun image! And the sneer it engenders seems inappropriate to this woman in need. I applaud the nail in the coffin. A fine narrative of shoes to walk in.

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  6. This is really good. From the depths of the heart...the mouth speaketh - revealing the true character. How small-minded!

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  7. How careful we must be in our friendships to notice such a feature of others character and heart (or lack of). I love the way you presented this story/poem for us.

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  8. Some people really are insufferable. The guy in this poem is one of them.

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  9. What a prick. I'm glad she got out of the relationship.
    Anna :o]

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  10. a closed mind often beggars a closed heart - but one can never know when the tables will turn - there is no certainty in life ... I really liked the line - "doing it tough" .... that spoke absolute volumes.

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  11. I have been on both sides...personally, I would rather be in shabby shoes than in the high heels of a smug entitled prick. The harder they come, the harder they fall.

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  12. Ugh! Good riddance to that creep! There is a Greek idiom uttered when one sends someone packing rather unceremoniously: "She gave him his shoes in his hands". Quite apt here I think ;-)

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