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Sunday, June 24, 2018

Sunday's Whirligig # 167

THIS WEEK'S WORDS come from "Five Chinese Verses" by Wendy Xu:



sweltering cooling toe without gaze gate
 forward dimming glint text while taste




for a while
it was sweltering
then cooling
dimming to a feint glint
finally a cold gaze

the final straw
a nasty text
leaving a bitter taste
painful as an ingrown toe nail

without regret
the gate stays shut
it's time to move forward

Poets Pantry - Poets United



13 comments:

  1. Nice sequence Rall. Happy you dropped by my Sunday Standard today

    Much💞love

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  2. I'm seeing a lot of poems about texting and technology today...it speaks to the power they have in our lives now. I felt the pain in your words - lovely writing!

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  3. No way out but through, forward is the only direction. Well said.

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  4. One knows when it is time to move forward. Sadly, sometimes that is one's only choice. Albeit one made with regret, feeling powerless to change the tide.

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  5. That final straw can be bitter, but our hearts know when it is time to move on....really wonderfully done!

    Donna@LivingFromHappiness

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  6. Those nasty texts can certainly color our outlook on life. I don't blame the speaker in the poem for keeping the gate shut. Why open it to a nasty texter?

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  7. Love the first stanza, a relationship like a single day.

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  8. Sometimes we just have to close that gate on our past and open it to our future.
    Anna :o]

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  9. oh that ingrown toenail reference is perfect..somehow a nasty text is a hundred times worse than a nasty face to face.

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  10. A nasty experience indeed – and forward is the only way, yes.

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  11. Yes, move forward from that ingrown toenail. People seem to feel their ugly has a right when they let it flow through their fingers.

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