Rallentanda

Rallentanda

Wednesday, August 13, 2025

Whats Going On


you gave
her a moment
of magic just briefly
she knew it had to sustain her
for the rest of her time here on the earth
reality's not her strong suit
to return to a life 
without you is
too sad

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9 comments:

  1. Reality is painful indeed at times - I love how you summon such big emotion in so few words - very powerful - Jae

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  2. Yes, with a love like that, imagine the depth of the grief and loss. You have captured it so well.

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  3. The brief poem evokes such strong emotions and sadness. The lines "she knew it had to sustain her/ for the rest of her time here on the earth" express much strength and grit.

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  4. Rall, I liked your moment of magic, nice way to go, nicely penned.

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  5. Very intense, just as that "one magic moment" can be, and yes it can last for a whole life long. Beautiful, Rall!

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  6. To stay with the moments that feed you is an almost impossible escape from reality, best done in private with a "Do not disturb" sign on the door. I could be the person in your poem.

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  7. So much is felt in this brief time. Beautiful poem, Rall.

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