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Rallentanda

Tuesday, September 23, 2025

W3 PROMPT # 178-----FRIDAY WRITINGS # 196

silence
beneath the waves
a world at peace in a rockpool 
holding her breath
she glides along lightly parting the weed
as the small fish dart out to greet her
silence 
except for her racing heart beat
driven by the memory of a soft touch
soft word whispers of love 
now too late
gone



 
Schubert Impomptu no 3...Alfred Brendel
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22 comments:

  1. Kim Whysall-HammondSeptember 24, 2025 at 6:25 AM

    A wonderful poem! That last line is so simple and haunting.

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  2. AnonymousSeptember 24, 2025 at 11:19 PM

    Gone! And then all that remains is the silence—beautifully done. Thanks, Rall. Xo, selma

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  3. David M. Gascoigne,September 25, 2025 at 3:50 AM

    An accomplished poem. Very evocative. Thanks for the Schubert link. I hadn’t heard this piece in a while.

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  4. JanSeptember 25, 2025 at 11:59 AM

    Very good. Love the heartbeat shape.

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  5. Jae RoseSeptember 26, 2025 at 2:56 AM

    A delicate and refined depiction of love and loss - Jae

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  6. IntelliblogSeptember 26, 2025 at 6:18 AM

    A beautiful poem, Rall. Well suited to the autumnal mood... Brendel is a master!

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  7. ChristineSeptember 26, 2025 at 8:41 AM

    Very beautiful

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  8. Rosemary Nissen-WadeSeptember 26, 2025 at 9:09 AM

    Exquisitely beautiful!

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  9. murisopsisSeptember 26, 2025 at 9:12 AM

    Beautifully done! Bravo!

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  10. MarjaSeptember 26, 2025 at 7:16 PM

    Wow that is a gorgeous poem Peaceful and beautiful

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  11. J Cosmo NewberySeptember 26, 2025 at 8:05 PM

    Lovely. Loving. I have found it is never too late. For the individual maybe, but not the sensation.

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  12. MargaretSeptember 27, 2025 at 10:18 AM

    "a world at peace in a rockpool this line really made me think -

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  13. ben AlexanderSeptember 27, 2025 at 11:57 AM

    Rall, I really like how your poem moves from calm waters to “soft word whispers of love / now too late”—it gave me much to think about.

    Much love,
    David
    SkepticsKaddish.com

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  14. HelenSeptember 27, 2025 at 4:23 PM

    Love you began with silence and ended with gone ~~~ the ultimate "peaceful easy feeling" kind of vibe.

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  15. Sarah DavidSeptember 27, 2025 at 6:28 PM

    Beautiful imagery ❤️

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  16. shaun/tenzenmenSeptember 27, 2025 at 8:06 PM

    Your poem reminds me of the little fish and prawns that live in the rice fields all around me. "A world at peace", at least until someone comes out the catch them.

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  17. Linda's Relaxing LairSeptember 28, 2025 at 11:22 PM

    Lovely poem.

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  18. colleenSeptember 29, 2025 at 8:14 AM

    She's gone too soon.

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  19. RommySeptember 29, 2025 at 12:23 PM

    I can't help contemplating who or what the she is in this piece. No, no... don't tell me. I love the enigmatic nature of it.

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  20. ben AlexanderOctober 1, 2025 at 8:06 AM

    hi, Rall❣️

    Just wanna let you know that this week's W3, hosted by our beloved Michelle, is now live:

    W3

    Much love,
    David
    SkepticsKaddish.com

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  21. purplepeninportland.comOctober 2, 2025 at 6:00 PM

    Lovely, Rall!

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  22. Priscilla KingOctober 8, 2025 at 5:04 AM

    The poem and the music go together well!

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