Rallentanda

Rallentanda

Saturday, August 6, 2011

Walled City



how many times
how many times
had she lay
on a creaky iron bed
in a cheap pensione
in the heat
of the afternoon
off a still baking street
in a walled city
treeless
geraniumless
art treasur'd bastion
of western culture
revered adulated
striving sacrificing
to get here
and soon afterwards
always
wishing she were
somewhere else

20 comments:

  1. Could this be the girl in the painting - running, always running, between city walls?

    ReplyDelete
  2. Yep...she runs like quick silver and no one has caught her yet:)!

    ReplyDelete
  3. when you get where you think you want and realise it is not that is a scary thing indeed...perhaps as quick as she runs she will escape yet..

    ReplyDelete
  4. The first thing a cat does on entering new territory is to check out an escape route.

    ReplyDelete
  5. so what might she be running from/to and which direction shall it be?

    ReplyDelete
  6. To and fro and in all directions I should think:)
    She likes marathon events.I envy her. She is never anywhere long ehough to lead a real life.

    ReplyDelete
  7. Oh what a lovely poem of searching and waiting...:)
    The last lines and these lines are rock:
    in the heat
    of the afternoon
    off a still baking street
    in a walled city
    treeless
    geraniumless

    Btw, your picture's blog (above)is so Indonesia... :)

    ReplyDelete
  8. Terima kasih Nene. I'm entering an Indonesian phase at the moment.

    ReplyDelete
  9. art treasur'd bastion
    of western culture
    revered adulated
    striving sacrificing
    to get here
    and soon afterwards
    always
    wishing she were
    somewhere else

    I can't tell you how many times I've had this experience. That insidious moment when I realize how much I've sacrificed to appreciate something that doesn't hold meaning for me.

    ReplyDelete
  10. Thanks chromaposey..it's not often I have a shared experience:)

    ReplyDelete
  11. I've been back a while Ms Chillipops!

    ReplyDelete
  12. For me, this captures the same sense of whimsy that comes with the running of the hula hoop...as innocence is lost to the pervading shadows...hmmm, I'll be left to ponder this one for some time! Truly enjoyed :)

    ReplyDelete
  13. I loved your poem.
    She is trapped forever in that frozen world
    maybe trying to escape or dumb whrling and playing with ideas in that baron world of unknown dangers.
    You really made me think about a painting which i have looked at so many times
    thankyou

    ReplyDelete
  14. I like your fresh voice and viewpoint. Your poem has a taut and cinematic quality. It pushed me to read others on your blog. Quite a talent. I look forward to reading more. Thank you, Gay

    ReplyDelete
  15. Glad to know I'm stretching the grey matter Natascha. Thank you for visiting.

    ReplyDelete
  16. Ditto Arron,thank you for visiting

    ReplyDelete
  17. Hi praise from another talented poet. Thank you,
    Gay.

    ReplyDelete
  18. are we all trying to escape our self made walls ? this is what this poem makes me ask ...really enjoyed it thank you

    ReplyDelete
  19. Good question Kez! Thank you for visiting.

    ReplyDelete