moonrise
holding their hands on their knees
evening at a house
Basho
strains of melody come from
behind the paper thin walls
a balmy night
in spring - white cherry blossoms
perfuming the breeze
the outline of her kimono
shimmering in the moonlight
the cricket chorus chirps
disturbing sleeping old frogs
dragonflies dance
lacey wings flit through tall reeds
beneath the pale yellow moon
the rustle of silk
colour of persimmon moves
like ripples on the water
he glides along like a prince
brushing her fingers with his sash
A renga full of sound and sensual atmosphere, very enjoyable to read
ReplyDelete[sigh!!!!!] Beautifully sensual and romantic. Very nicely done!
ReplyDeletenice sequence, like the way it ends on a sensuous note that "rustle of silk"
ReplyDeletemuch love...
great concoction of food for the senses. Look forward to seeing more of your haiku in June.
ReplyDeletenice indeed....words and actions perfectly matched with the senses....
ReplyDeleteI've just been listening to 'Holding back the Tears'. I must get my album out; I'd forgotten how good he was.
ReplyDeleteThere is always such beauty in nature and you have captured it well.
ReplyDeleteSuch beauty in night and the balmy breeze ah! what a serene night
ReplyDeleteI dig Basho and your poems too!
ReplyDeleteSuch a wonderful renga :D a most pleasurable one to read..!
ReplyDeleteHats off :D
Just beautiful altogether.
ReplyDeleteI love the sensory details in the third stanza. Really strong.
ReplyDeleteNice use of colour in this descriptive piece.
ReplyDeleteLovely last verse, and the picture caught my eye too :) Is the artwork yours?
ReplyDeleteNo...not mine!
DeleteIt was easy to get transported to that world :)
ReplyDeleteI like the alliteration and the movement of the color of persimmon...beautiful imagery.
ReplyDeleteThe fourth stanza is so beautiful I read it four times.
ReplyDeleteThank you Margaret !
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