Saana Rizvi Prompt Nights
“For love would be love of the wrong thing; there is yet faith, But the faith and the love and the hope are all in the waiting.” – T.S. Eliot
Shadorma
it's too late
to get back those years
they have gone
life plays jokes
the greek gods are lol
teasing deities
i hear you
your song reaches me
from the sea
the wind roars
your presence stays deep in me
waves pound thoughts of you
two shags on a rock
staying close surviving the storms
wet feathers and all
Heeding Haiku With Chevrefeuille
MLMM
Whistles!!❤️💜This is absolutely gorgeous execution of the form, Rall😊 especially love; "the wind roars, your presence stays deep in me, waves pound thoughts of you." Thank you so much for participating at Prompt Nights and for your constant love and support.❤️💜
ReplyDeleteLots of love,
Sanaa
This speaks to me about the comfort in a strong in constant love, despite the battering it may take from capricious outside forces.
ReplyDeleteI esho Sanaa's praise. Truly gorgeous. I especially love the 2nd and 3rd poems.
ReplyDeleteI'm always impressed by your mastery of language. Even when using restrictive, short forms, your poems are incredibly dense with meaning. You've given me yet another poetic skill to strive for.
-B
Thank you...generous praise from a gifted poet.
DeleteThank you for these wonderful looks back (in manyways)
ReplyDeleteThe value of life and relationships certainly escalates as years pass yet all that richness is but memories in the end to accompany loneliness.
ReplyDeleteI love this mix. The first part made me chuckle--it was delicious to see mythology and lol in the same line. The ending haiku is magnificent, powerful commentary on the nature of healthy relationships.
ReplyDeleteThe second is my very favourite. :)
ReplyDelete(And thanks for Sting.)
I enjoyed these very much, especially the second, which I can relate to. The haiku reminds me of home and in the first, I especially liked the lines
ReplyDelete"the greek gods are lol
teasing deities" and so they may be,,
I would luv to know what the Japanese??? characters represent
ReplyDeleteluv this sharing
much love...
Means Caribbean chicks are cool !
DeleteNah just joking
Means LOVE
"your presence stays deep in me....staying close surviving the storm..." leaves such a special feeling in my soul right now. Wonderful writing XXX
ReplyDeleteloved the second one...packed with depth...!
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