Napowrimo poem Day 13
Prompt : Norman Dubie first line
'The lights of the galaxy
are strung out over
a dipper of gin '
The sprinkling of stars
in the firmament fizz
tonic water over ice
The green sampans
are wedges of lime
on a sea of floating bergs
Gordon has been my
seasonal love forever
Mother's ruin? Maybe
but a summer without him
would be
a bath without bubbles
a king without I
a g without t
B&M (Brown and Mild) more to my liking, but hey... I'll have whatever you're drinking...
ReplyDeleteI can taste it.
ReplyDeleteLime and all.
Hi Rall,
ReplyDeleteGordon is a friend to many, don't get too attached!
I'm so fickle Derrick:) Just discovered my new love at dinner tonight. Pikes
ReplyDelete"The Dogwalk" Cabernet Merlot Clare Valley SA 2007.Gordon doesn't get a look in now til next summer.
Send a case over and we'll join you in a toast!
ReplyDeleteGreat poem. Especially liked the first half.
ReplyDeleteThat is a nice line, isn't it. Odd I've never tried gin
ReplyDeleteMakes me want to start drinking! Beautiful poem!
ReplyDeleteLoved your rendition of Dubie. "...sprinkling of stars in a firmament of fizz" ...Love it. It's obvious I'm taking all of this too seriously - and also - I don't know what in the heck your other commenters are talking about. Oh me, am I out of it -
ReplyDeleteI couldn't get past the first line either...but with summer....we mite get by the first gin and tonic...or second... thanks again Rall for your words.....and reading my words...cheers to you and yours
ReplyDeleteBottoms up Ral, don't drink, but if I still did, I'd be havin' the Glenlivet 18-year-old single malt -- so here's to you, and damned well written... ...keep the NaPoWriMo 2010 energy flowin’...
ReplyDelete…rob
Image & Verse
Rall,
ReplyDeleteMerlot is a favourite of mine! I can certainly do without the g&t. But I did enjoy your poem!
Pamela
Pity Babs. One of life's great pleasures along with Sydney Rock oysters.
ReplyDeleteWanda,Gordon's gin is a famous brand.
ReplyDeleteI like the fizzy stars, and a twist of lime (line?) always grabs my attention.
ReplyDeleteI do like a good G&T, with lots of ice and lime!
ReplyDeleteLoved "The sprinkling of stars in the firmament fizz tonic water over ice The green sampans
are wedges of lime on a sea of floating bergs
Gordon has been my seasonal love forever." And Gordon, of course!
It's all wonderful .. like being at a grand party!!!
I think I should give a grand party for us when we complete this marathon
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