Napowrimo poem Day 16
Prompt: Smells and memory
Wafts of peanut oil,ripe mangoustines
and frangipani transport me back
to the kitchen garden of the losman
in the land of the Garuda
long before the tourist invasion
where days were spent
sitting on a step
contemplating tanned feet and
a colony of ants crawling
in military precision across a path
when life was easy and the road
stretched out ahead for what seemed
an infinity
I can relate somewhat... same, same - but different.
ReplyDeleteLovely, lovely! Great line: "when life was easy and the road stretched out ahead for what seemed
ReplyDeletean infinity"
Sweet, comforting memories from childhood. A gentle journey back, Rall.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you described the smell so vividly in the beginning, and then you proceeded onto the memory. Good work!
ReplyDeleteGreat poem.
ReplyDeleteI crack up when I see Derrick's picture stuck in the back window. :-D
Beautiful, transported me to the land of the Garuda.
ReplyDeleteI love how this goes back to memories of contemplating the future, the open road. Wonderful.
ReplyDeleteI've never been to that part of the world, but you certainly instill the desire to visit it, though I guess that would make me one of the tourists. Great ending, with its feeling of life opening up.
ReplyDeleteI just noticed Derrick back there, too! Whaaat.
ReplyDeleteLove the language in this, simple and sweet like a Madeleine de Proust.
Yes - the smell evoked a great memory - sad, too, that it will never be the same again. Quite visual with ants in military precision on a road that reached to eternity. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteWonderful memories, skilfully retold.
ReplyDeleteFabulous! Nice use of alliteration.
ReplyDeleteRall,
ReplyDeleteWonderful scents and memories! I too love the pic of Derrick. Very funny!
Pamela
Wow, this reminded me of some exotic travel just reading it, you know how some smells we really don't have here, wherever here is, and when we run across them it's like going back.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful images, and love the line about days spent contemplating tanned feet...weren't those the days! Nice job sticking Derrick in the back of the van!!
ReplyDeletecertainly a nice aroma to these memories Rall
ReplyDeleteWhat nice comments! Thanky'all.
ReplyDeletegreat poem
ReplyDeletecan almost taste it
cheers
janet
I got side tracked by your T Rex and forgot to comment. This is a graceful poem. The images are lovely, but there is something special in the way it moves.
ReplyDeleteThanks sugar plum! It is a reworking of part of one I did ages ago. It is a special one and I'm glad you picked it.
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