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Friday, April 16, 2010

Love in the time of Java


Napowrimo poem Day 16
Prompt: Smells and memory

Wafts of peanut oil,ripe mangoustines
and frangipani transport me back
to the kitchen garden of the losman
in the land of the Garuda
long before the tourist invasion
where days were spent
sitting on a step
contemplating tanned feet and
a colony of ants crawling
in military precision across a path
when life was easy and the road
stretched out ahead for what seemed
an infinity

20 comments:

  1. I can relate somewhat... same, same - but different.

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  2. Lovely, lovely! Great line: "when life was easy and the road stretched out ahead for what seemed
    an infinity"

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  3. Sweet, comforting memories from childhood. A gentle journey back, Rall.

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  4. I liked how you described the smell so vividly in the beginning, and then you proceeded onto the memory. Good work!

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  5. Great poem.

    I crack up when I see Derrick's picture stuck in the back window. :-D

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  6. Beautiful, transported me to the land of the Garuda.

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  7. I love how this goes back to memories of contemplating the future, the open road. Wonderful.

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  8. I've never been to that part of the world, but you certainly instill the desire to visit it, though I guess that would make me one of the tourists. Great ending, with its feeling of life opening up.

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  9. I just noticed Derrick back there, too! Whaaat.

    Love the language in this, simple and sweet like a Madeleine de Proust.

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  10. Yes - the smell evoked a great memory - sad, too, that it will never be the same again. Quite visual with ants in military precision on a road that reached to eternity. Very nice.

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  11. Wonderful memories, skilfully retold.

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  12. Fabulous! Nice use of alliteration.

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  13. Rall,
    Wonderful scents and memories! I too love the pic of Derrick. Very funny!
    Pamela

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  14. Wow, this reminded me of some exotic travel just reading it, you know how some smells we really don't have here, wherever here is, and when we run across them it's like going back.

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  15. Beautiful images, and love the line about days spent contemplating tanned feet...weren't those the days! Nice job sticking Derrick in the back of the van!!

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  16. certainly a nice aroma to these memories Rall

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  17. great poem
    can almost taste it
    cheers
    janet

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  18. I got side tracked by your T Rex and forgot to comment. This is a graceful poem. The images are lovely, but there is something special in the way it moves.

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  19. Thanks sugar plum! It is a reworking of part of one I did ages ago. It is a special one and I'm glad you picked it.

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