Rallentanda

Rallentanda

Wednesday, September 7, 2011

A Message

3WW...observe erode heart

please listen and observe
my darling
this consistently glum
reticent unyielding
strictured insufferable
sanctimonious sourpuss
self - centred stance
will erode all feeling
from even the most
ardent heart

11 comments:

  1. Cleverly written, and with meaning...

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  2. Phew, I think I got the message Rall!



    Line 6 typo?

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  3. Well that has told him! Funny in its frustration.

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  4. A stiff warning I suspect..although served with a slice of humour..yum..Jae

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  5. Now that's honest R. great write- memorable.

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  6. Thanks all. I'm away at the moment and can't access computer often so when back will get around to visiting y'all.
    Cheers
    Rall

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  7. That is telling it like it is! :-)

    Nice writing. I loved it! :-)

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  8. yes totally grouchiness will do that,wonderful poem.

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