Rallentanda

Rallentanda

Thursday, June 26, 2014

For The Weekend



a beautiful winter sun
dies softly into the plains
the bird song ceases
the stillness fades
as night falls on the ancient vastness

this is my last day here for a while
i leave you and my other dreams
snug and warm in this little farm house
until i return

you know
sometimes
sometimes you just take my breath away




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16 comments:

  1. Brian MillerJune 28, 2014 at 10:38 AM

    tender...almost lyrical...with one eye on where you are going and one behind...really nice close ral.

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  2. Sherry Blue SkyJune 28, 2014 at 10:50 AM

    These are very beautiful lines. I especially love "night falls on the ancient vastness."

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  3. PeggyJune 28, 2014 at 11:16 AM

    What a really beautiful piece. Thanks for sharing.

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  4. GabriellaJune 28, 2014 at 12:54 PM

    This looks like a beautiful and serene place. I gather you are going back into the city. Enjoy your winter!

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  5. MaryJune 28, 2014 at 12:54 PM

    I hear the sadness in your lines, Rallentanda, the nostalgia for this place before it has been left. I am sure you will return again & rediscover the same beauty. Nicely penned.

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  6. ScarletJune 28, 2014 at 1:11 PM

    Beautiful music and inspired words specially the ending, you take my breath away ~

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  7. Myrna R.June 28, 2014 at 1:34 PM

    What a dear way to say good bye. I like the sentiment in this. Enjoyed.

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  8. scotthastiepoetJune 28, 2014 at 2:42 PM

    I agree with Brian - very lyrical work and you've certainly point to something special here...

    "as night falls on the ancient vastness....sometimes you just take my breath away"

    Lovely... With Best Wishes Scott

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  9. AnonymousJune 28, 2014 at 7:36 PM

    A beautiful ode to the place and space that holds a special place in the heart. I fully believe in thanking the Spirit of a space when we enter and when we leave. I have no doubt a Spirit respected says connected to our hearts with a clear intention of support wherever we might take ourselves.

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  10. BeachannyJune 28, 2014 at 9:03 PM

    Don't know where you are - but I know the great American plains and it always takes my breath away; it always inspires my poetry. Beautiful work here. Well done!

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  11. brudbergJune 28, 2014 at 11:39 PM

    I think if we leave the wish to come back we leave pebbles on the path to find our way back...

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  12. AnonymousJune 28, 2014 at 11:55 PM

    Your last stanza, conversational but beautifully balanced, is gorgeous. And it could be addressed to the landscape, or a person. It works either way. Lovely.

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  13. SusanJune 29, 2014 at 4:33 AM

    Love. Poem and song. How wonderful that first the bird song fades and then the silence! I'd love to hear the sounds of this night. Poetry, most likely.

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  14. ayalaJune 29, 2014 at 4:40 AM

    aww so tender. Lovely!

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  15. AnonymousJune 29, 2014 at 9:34 AM

    we leave places and people, but those we love always stay with us.

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  16. AnonymousJune 29, 2014 at 10:04 AM

    I love this poem. Beautiful.

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