- afternoon centuries silence sugar forbidden
- untried dust march teasingly rise
- primrose shadows inseparable open strawberry
- smudge song bowl yellow care
a smudge of strawberry sugar
on her lips
opening her mouth teasingly
not a care in the world
forbidden fruit the sweetest
a bowl of yellow primrose
open buds casting shadows
on a march autumn afternoon
a young couple full of hope
inseparable
their love untried
centuries of dust
in this silent place
no bird song here
poverty giving rise
to seditious thoughts
revolution
Oh .. my .. goodness!!💜 These are beyond beautiful! My favorite is the first one; "a smudge of strawberry sugar on her lips..." such masterly use of the word list, Rall! Thank you so much for participating!💜
ReplyDeleteI like the title of the poem - clever idea to set each stanza as a picture. Great use of the word list in compiling each image.
ReplyDeleteWhat a brilliant idea - to write about the paintings but don't show them... Now I'm curious to see them! smudge of "a smudge of strawberry sugar on her lips", "open buds casting shadows", "no bird song"... all very intriguing...
ReplyDeleteStunning, Rall!
ReplyDeleteOh, my hard took a twist when I got to your ending. Beautiful, powerful piece.
ReplyDeleteExcellent use of the word list. I like your descriptions of the paintings rather than showing the painting themselves, avoiding an ekphrasic description. Each one is unique.
ReplyDeleteStrong images, so well described. Love the title.
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