Rallentanda

Rallentanda

Tuesday, October 4, 2011

Porkies




we said we would remain friends
hoping to stem the gushing
blood flow from the massive wounds
we had inflicted on each other
our devastation too awful to face

we say wished for truths to each other
to salve the agony to unscramble the egg
and as we look up at the sky
we see those pink piggies flying
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13 comments:

  1. hedgewitchOctober 4, 2011 at 7:12 PM

    No kidding. That 'friends' stuff usually lasts about 24 hours--it ain't happenin. Like the way you got your message across here with the bare minimum of vivid image.

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  2. Brian MillerOctober 4, 2011 at 7:17 PM

    haha when pigs fly...yeah we can inflict some pretty terrible wounds on each other in friendships....

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  3. ShonEjaiOctober 4, 2011 at 7:29 PM

    Very intense!

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  4. ClaudiaOctober 4, 2011 at 10:13 PM

    hedgewitch's comment makes me smile as i just thought the same when reading your...we remain friends line...love the pink piggies at the end..drives it home nicely

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  5. Classic NYerOctober 5, 2011 at 1:12 AM

    "friends"... I hope I'm never "friends" with another ex again.

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  6. Shashidhar SharmaOctober 5, 2011 at 4:21 AM

    Its powerfully written and your imagery is beautiful...
    'blood flow from the massive wounds
    we had inflicted on each other'

    Thanks for sharing such a lovely verse and for joining in the Poetry Picnic ... Look forward to your posts on "Friends, Relationships and every one around.." next week ...

    Shashi
    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/10/whispers-love-and-loss-butterfly.html

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  7. The PoetOctober 5, 2011 at 11:02 AM

    Hello.
    Ha! You speak the truth, my friend.
    Nice imagery with the ending.

    Thanks for sharing.

    The Last Kiss

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  8. SheilaOctober 5, 2011 at 1:15 PM

    unscramble the egg - nice line and of course the pigs flying made me smile, too.

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  9. Isabel DoyleOctober 6, 2011 at 5:40 AM

    just a tad of bitter spice in the cooking?
    great lines, Rall

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  10. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson BarryOctober 8, 2011 at 7:02 AM

    witty words.
    Thanks for sharing.

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  11. Isabel DoyleOctober 9, 2011 at 1:47 AM

    did I not leave a comment before? Did it get lost in the ether?

    Isabel x

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  12. rallentandaOctober 9, 2011 at 4:00 AM

    Fraid so!

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  13. rallentandaOctober 12, 2011 at 9:41 AM

    Just found it in the spam box Isabel.

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