ugh...the second one...as if she was not present, univited...the sadness comes in her hope in the face of it...ugh...i read this very dark...and a bit scary.
You interpretation is not correct. Though on rereading an understandable mistake.I rarely give a background to poems but on this occasion I will.... just for you:)
One hot sultry afternoon the laundry girls return my clean laundry. They obviousy had not seen inside a fairly luxurious Western hotel before and felt so comfortable with me ( for whatever reason, ) sat down on the floor uninvited beside the bed in silence,looking around in wonder and obviously did not want to leave.
I live in this hotel a lot of the time now since I gave up my house so my room has a lot of beautiful decorative personal items art etc.that I leave here when I return to Australia.
It was a very comforting almost spiritual experience...and all experienced in complete silence .It is a recent experience ( just weeks ago) The only reason they left was someone knocked on the door to come looking for them.
I came close to that in my reading - I had thought a young couple had come to see a family member who was single and they all felt comfortable being quiet, enjoying the day, being able to explore both the area they were in physically and spiritually. I've had encounters like that.
The real experience seems even more special as it arced time and culture. This may deserve a longer poem. It is even here quite beautiful.
Until reading your explanation I saw darkness in your sentences too. Now I see it differently. A soft wave of calm washed over her bringing hope of belonging somewhere. How beautiful that you feel that. Anna :o]
I like the smooth flow of your american sentences. Each one works well, gives me a quick sense of understanding, teases the imagination to create more. Nice.
ugh...the second one...as if she was not present, univited...the sadness comes in her hope in the face of it...ugh...i read this very dark...and a bit scary.
ReplyDeleteThis in an interesting one. Well done, for sure.
ReplyDeleteYou interpretation is not correct. Though on rereading an understandable mistake.I rarely give a background to poems but on this occasion I will.... just for you:)
ReplyDeleteOne hot sultry afternoon the laundry girls return my clean laundry. They obviousy had not seen inside a fairly luxurious Western hotel before and felt so comfortable with me ( for whatever reason, ) sat down on the floor uninvited beside the bed in silence,looking around in wonder and obviously did not want to leave.
I live in this hotel a lot of the time now since I gave up my house so my room has a lot of beautiful decorative personal items art etc.that I leave here when I return to Australia.
It was a very comforting almost spiritual experience...and all experienced in complete silence .It is a recent experience ( just weeks ago) The only reason they left was someone knocked on the door to come looking for them.
A great compliment that they felt comfortable enough to do that.
ReplyDeleteI came close to that in my reading - I had thought a young couple had come to see a family member who was single and they all felt comfortable being quiet, enjoying the day, being able to explore both the area they were in physically and spiritually. I've had encounters like that.
ReplyDeleteThe real experience seems even more special as it arced time and culture. This may deserve a longer poem. It is even here quite beautiful.
It's a rare gift to be able to make people feel comfortable in your presence...really beautiful picture you create.
ReplyDeleteUntil reading your explanation I saw darkness in your sentences too. Now I see it differently.
ReplyDeleteA soft wave of calm washed over her
bringing hope of belonging somewhere.
How beautiful that you feel that.
Anna :o]
I like the smooth flow of your american sentences. Each one works well, gives me a quick sense of understanding, teases the imagination to create more. Nice.
ReplyDeleteYou wear gold thongs? Sacré bleu!
ReplyDeleteOf the shoe variety...yes ....and very lovely ones too !
ReplyDeleteAh, flip-flops ....
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