Rallentanda

Rallentanda

Wednesday, September 3, 2014

The Honey Eaters




poetry jam: poets united


i have finally escaped
the stormy weather
which has been dogging
the city for months

spring flicked the switch today
and the wattles dazzle yellow
against blue in the big outback sky





jeans and flannel shirts
stand still like soldiers armed
with clothes props
on the line stretched between the olive trees

i have been watching
the black chinned honey eater
gorging herself all afternoon
on the giant agave bloom
stopping only to sing a few notes
to me



24 comments:

  1. nice lines specially the last musical stanza of the honey eaters...lovely :)

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  2. So nice to experience the change of seasons...and to see those jeans and flannel shirts hanging out on the line!

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  4. really nice, have a good Wednesday

    much love...

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  5. I LOVE this scene - especially the black chinned honey eater!!!!

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  6. I am glad spring has arrived. Wonderful description here.

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  7. the change of life and the newness of beginning, nicely captured.

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  8. When that switch flicked, it was felt here, too. Fall is in the air, though, not spring! I love the clothes on the line like soldiers. I'm assuming clothes props are what we call clothespins. Ah, spring! Enjoy!

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  9. Ohhhh. Beautiful. Love how the jeans take a back seat in this.

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  10. I looked up the black-chinned honeyeaters to find they exist and have a sweet song. For these images, the stormy weather must leave. I really like "spring flipped the switch," the "jeans and flannels standing like soldiers" and the gorging and performing honey eater. How could your narrator not be spellbound?

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  11. I agree completely with Susan and echo her words.

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  12. A wonderful walk and talk with nature. Spring full of color (she's such a show off)

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  13. Nice. What a great description of beautiful scenery and a fine day. Enjoy.

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  14. You paint a wonderful picture. I enjoyed that it was after the storm.

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  15. A beautiful moment of yellow togetherness...i like that you had that... :)

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  16. Thank you.,,yellow togetherness offsets my puce parting ( smirkles !:)

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  17. Loved the imagery created with the setting of the storm-the third stanza is wonderful enjoyed this poem Thanks for sharing Best wishes for your poetry

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  18. so sweet this poem is..it has musical quality loved it

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  19. In a fantasy world, I would live in the Northern Hemisphere during Spring and Fall and in the Southern Hemisphere during Spring and Fall!!!

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  20. Beautifully captured moments of Spring's arrival, Rall. We've enjoyed a marvellous Spring day in Melbourne today (Sunday)

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    1. I am so pleased Nick. We have had a gorgeous one up here in the sticks as well:)

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