Mahon Pool Sydney
a savage beauty
not for the faint hearted
not for the faint hearted
no one
swimming today
in the pool
an angry seascape
shrieks "keep out"
the wind howls
the waves crash
shrieks "keep out"
the wind howls
the waves crash
two more months of winter
two more months of icy gloom
two more months of icy gloom
Mahon Pool
Rall, your poem, is a distilled snapshot of mood and atmosphere, love it 🙌
ReplyDeleteI can feel the harshness of the environment in your words
ReplyDeleteBeautifully captures the water's emotion.
ReplyDeleteYour poem is perfect in its succinct simplicity. And thanks for a little Vivaldi. There are those who dismiss him, but I always enjoy The Four Seasons.
ReplyDelete'Savage beauty' is a perfect description. I love the personification of the sea as it shrieks it warning, the acoustics in the poem bring the image to life wonderfully. The anaphora on the last two lines are so effective.
ReplyDeleteI don't need any convincing. Happy to stay out.
ReplyDeleteRall, this captures such raw atmosphere. I feel the chill in your words as much as the wind in the scene.
ReplyDeleteMuch love,
David
SkepticsKaddish.com
That's quite a tantrum the sea is having!
ReplyDeleteRall, this is a perfect example of the power of free verse - like the ocean charging outside its boundaries!
ReplyDeleteA bleak outlook.🥶
ReplyDeleteGreat personification 💞
ReplyDeletevivid!
ReplyDeleteWonderful poem beautifully expressing the savagery of the sea 🌊 I personally love the sea in wintertime. 💙
ReplyDeleteI do miss Australian beaches and getting thrown around in the surf. Summers only though!
ReplyDeletehi, XXX 💕
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Enjoy❣️
Much love,
David
SkepticsKaddish.com