poetry jam :poets united
It's A Long And Winding Road Except If You Are Swimming
Frost's two roads
both looked good
from a distance
the road less travelled
held particular appeal
on closer examination
the travellers on both
were a heartless hypocritical lot
in spite of their display
of marching for the social good
love and peace signs
prayer mats crosses
incense and tree hugging
there may have been a reason
He walked on water
perhaps giving a clue
it is safer out there
than on land
so she took to the sea
armed with a set of fish knives
(nice looking ones..mother of pearl
inlay )
and a kettle
at least the sharks (swimming variety)
only eat you
when they are hungry
Whatever creed one professes it is unlikely it will have impact on others. But there are some who keep bothering others. Just leave them alone. Good message Rallentanda!
ReplyDeleteHank
I like this and it has a real questioning depth.
ReplyDeleteInteresting. It needs a couple of reads before you can pick out the bones.
ReplyDeleteWonderful!. Great poem. Perhaps there are no social goods remaining. If hypocrites took to the waters, society might have a chance. But as is, dare those who are genuine leave society completely?
ReplyDeleteI think you found the third way....or wave...whatever it feels like that journey is in hand
ReplyDeleteOh how I love this! Love "it is safer out there"!! This poem has a nice bite to it!
ReplyDeleteMy comment disappeared! I liked, as always. Questioned who should get out of the way of whom.
ReplyDeleteShe really took a very different path. Perhaps we all must, to eliminate the evils so prevalent in this world.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your last comment on my blog. You said my poem inspired you to write something. Glad I was able to do that. Thanks for reading my poems.
Yes I wrote it almost immediately. A short one.
DeleteHmmm, a case os it being safer in the water, sharks notwithstanding. Interestign take on the prompt, Rall. I enjoyed this one!
ReplyDeleteWell that is a fairly honest path. You know what is coming.
ReplyDeleteshe seems to be following the trail left by the man...hope she is safe...thanks Rallentanda for participating :)
ReplyDeleteAre you considering the path of a lone Ninja armed with such a fine set of knives? Frost's two roads speak to indecision and constant regret over choices made. The "what if" syndrome.
ReplyDeleteAnd you know why he walked on water. Indecision and lack of faith means we sink when it gets stormy.
Erm..excuse me Dodo boy.I do understand Matthew 14 and its implications and eyes off my expensive fish knives:)
DeleteGood to remember there are all kinds of pathways to choose.
ReplyDeleteWe may take different paths, but the expectation of character and the development of one's own rely on essentially the same principals.
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Here, here! I second the motion for an ocean path. Love your wit and creativity :-)
ReplyDeleteThat last line was quite a stunner. I liked your interpretation of the prompt --- very well written!
ReplyDeleteA very thought provoking write - your message cleverly articulated with wry clarity.
ReplyDeleteI love this 'took on the water'...just very close from my view ...only swimming - something to work on ,and also, - to change the instrument: guitar instead of piano ~ love it :)xx
ReplyDeleteLoved the line "at least shark only eats you when they are hungry". A creative take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteThis was a fun, witty and cutting piece. Lots of layers to savor.
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