poetry jam: 3WW: dverse:
she called
he answered
she talked rubbish
she said she had to go
she then got into bed
covered herself with
a thousand duvets
and willed herself
to melt and disappear
into the mattress springs
the thought of losing
yet another relationship
because of some blunder
or faux pas on her part
made her cringe
with embarrassment
tearing at her fragile mind
she tended to digress
flitter and flutter
from topic to topic
nervously twitching
her transparent wings
to hide her fear
doing her best to put at bay
her perceived inevitable fate
being superceded
by a prettier butterfly
not yet pinned to a board
insecurity is tough...first, it keeps us from really embracing the risk in relationship and letting it get to a healthy level where we dont have to feel insecure...that they are concerned with a prettier butterfly hints at their own personal insecurities as well...
ReplyDeleteI have grown quite fond of my own insecurities...I find the confidence of those who strut is unsubstantiated.. just a lot of self promotion, persuasive p r, and emperors clothes syndrome.
DeleteUgh ... that feeling of always questioning one's worth. It stymies so many peaceful times within a relationship when things should just flow and not be questioned, analyzed changed up because of insecurity ... it also stymies relationships with other women ... ugh. This is a powerful write that revolves around the beauty of those butterflies ... well done!
ReplyDeleteInteresting and thought provoking comment.
Deletesuch wonderful imagery to describe the feelings of the insecure woman who thought she would enviably be put aside.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sheilagh!
DeleteI think you have expressed a fear that many have, that they are not WORTHY, that they will be replaced by someone smarter, prettier, wittier or whatever. Sometimes I think these fears are a self-defeating prophecy. And somehow you bring about just it is you fear.
ReplyDeleteThat is a Hindu belief...think it and you will bring it about.
DeleteI don't actually believe that. If you think it ...it is probably your insight a premonition setting off the warning bells!
interesting words that create a real sense of insecurity and trust. Very well formed and very intriguing.
ReplyDeleteThanks Alan.
DeleteInsecurity like this too often ends up becoming a self-fulfilling prophecy; the paralysing fear of being cast aside produces exactly what it fears most.
ReplyDeleteWell so they say:)
DeleteOne more stepping stone leading to the right one.
ReplyDeleteThere is no right one...some are just better than others:)
DeleteLOL! Beautifully done! Drips anxiety and doubt, so natural under the circumstances. But it seems that you are afraid losing a relationship before you've even fully formed it? (adopts quizzical smile that no emoticon captures).
ReplyDeleteAnd what if the (superceding?) 'butterfly' was really a nasty destructive moth who leaves holes in the fabric of civilised life?
Smirklies...this is just a poem...you know how they fly in through the window and sit on the page...nothing much to do with the writer..I mothballed myself years ago against the silverfish and moths:)
DeleteLove your reply here rallentanda! Smirklies indeed :-)
DeleteYou perfectly describe some of the nights from my youth that I happily forgot. At least they aren't so painful to me now, looking through hindsight.
ReplyDeleteOh sorry to do this to you Audrey!
DeleteA really impressive (and expressive) use of the prompt. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteWhy thank you sir!
DeleteFoot in the mouth disease is not uncommon for for both sexes. It certainly makes you a less than perfect specimen to collect. It is better to keep quiet and appear mysterious that open your mouth and show a gaping hole in your character.
ReplyDeleteWas wondering about your mysterious facade...boy that must be some big hole:)
DeleteVery nicely done. Truly some people are just too picky, or they Well done. Should move everyone to yell ouch.
ReplyDeleteGreat perspective, interpretation of the challenge! I've had a few of those moments!!
ReplyDeleteI love surprise endings!! Very well done--and OMG does this ever describe calls from friends back in the day--Drama! (no thx) Love what you did here :-)
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