Rallentanda

Rallentanda

Monday, January 20, 2014

Haiku Heights



dverse oln


he pressed her buttons
she yearned to reconnect him
little voice said no




he loved sticking sharp
pins into her effigy
watching her suffer




child's ingratitude
sharper than a serpent's tooth
all consuming pain

14 comments:

  1. oh, well done. and a tad bit shorter than Will's ode to ingratitude ~

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  2. I loved the comparison with the serpent's tooth! Nice haiku :)

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    1. " How sharper than a serpent's tooth it is to have a thankless child. "
      ...Shakespeare

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  3. ooooooooo, I felt these - very visceral - excellent!

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  4. I like your take on the prompt. Well done!

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  5. the last bit stings a bit...each of these adds an interesting layer of darkness...if i was her i would listen to the little voice...ingratitude irks me...

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  6. oh she def. should listen to that little voice... just pressing the right buttons is not enough...ugh

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  7. little voice said no
    in words sharper than a sword
    my grieving heart bleeds

    watching her suffer
    his words cut deeper than blade
    she learns love grows cold

    all consuming pain
    toothy grin makes me forget
    joy of motherhood

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    1. wrong spot celestine
      thank you anyway my dear
      it's rall's rollin' heights

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  8. wonderful haiku...especially like the way you work Will into the third.

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  9. Who doesn't love haiku?!!? A nice collection of haiku that you have posted.
    Cheers,

    Mark

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